A reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch
- From the last pitch I received feedback on the dynamics of the pitch such as voice level and tone. Both stated that I spoke louder and clearer, which made the pitch easier to comprehend. I received feedback stating that I varied my tone to highlight important aspects of the business. I do not think I can effectively vary my tone. So I'm not sure what the individual was referring to when they gave that feedback. Both of the individuals stated that the layout of my pitch was very effective. They stated that by starting out with some details about the problem and then providing a solution, my elevator pitch was effective in getting the point across.
What did you change, based on the feedback?
- I did not change much. I continued to try to speak loud and clear and vary my tone to highlight key components. I didn't get much feedback that would allow me to change my pitch. Since I changed my business plan, the pitch changed in the details.
I feel more comfortable in front of a camera but would still be nervous on a stage. One of my main struggles earlier was trying to perfect the pitch. I would stop the recording whenever I mess-up. For the last 2 elevator pitches I continued on such as if I were on a stage. I feel like the pitch stayed the same in its content.
I could see a major improvement from the first elevator pitch to this one. Your tone and speed was spot on and I really like how you created emphasizes on the important part that you wanted to convey to the audience. Your hand gestures during your pitch also aid in grabbing the audience attention. Overall, great job in the pitch. Keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteAgain I really liked your video and I think your idea is great. The only thing I would critique and is something that I wanted to do different for my video, is video where my idea would relevant. I was doing something for outdoors so I wanted to maybe video myself riding my bike or just outside. Maybe you could have video yourself in the gym.
ReplyDeleteHey Larry, nice job. You have continued to improve by just changing minor things. Like last time, you spoke clearly and loudly, but you made better use of tone this time. I like the new business plan. I agree with you that it's easy to be comfortable in front of the camera but my stage presence is still questionable. Great job at crafting and delivering an effect speech.
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